Hooray for Ryelle!
Since replying to this thread is still an available option how about we post some commentaries or criticsm?
TEXT 1
It exhibits the usual banter a diplomat of an alliance receives when one of their members did something that doesn't please another player.
"We have tried in our end to avail with him for almost 4 months
but to no avail."
This part is confusing. The content was short but fun. Over all, it's still fun to read.
TEXT 2
Who is Maxual Gutenberg? (is that the Author? oooh, grounds for disqualification
)
It's like I'm reading news from my daily bulletin or listening to news. It describes the "assumed daily activities" of the citizens within your local town.
The text takes your imagination to a spin but the weight of its content is not really that substantial.
Although the the content is limited, the effort sown in making it neat and presentable is very astounding.
TEXT 3
A story about a bunny named Benny. Well I can understand that he's scared of the "Demon Digger." A very nice story. It used elements of danger and suspense which was nice. But what I don't like is that WHY IS IT A DREAM
It's like watching Lovers in Paris all over again
You should remember using the correct articles (a, an, the) and punctuation marks as well.
Sorry but I don't like "Dream Stories" (oh yes, just like Alice in Wonderland)
TEXT 4
Funny
Bunnies eat flowers. This sentence took all my attention
.
"He bought the chocolate for 10 euros." This sentence broke the 3rd world barrier
but why did the birds tweak? Can't they just tweet?
Short and nice brother, loved it. Overall
TEXT 5
This story has piqued my interest quite a bit as it is the only DRAMA I have read so far from all the entries. It's a narration about a child and his misfortunes.
Even though I don't know how sick the author's mind was pitting a poor helpless child to such misery, the overall plot of the story is really a big mystery which really makes you want to read it more.
Sad, but yet enticing.
I'll read the others and tell you what I think of them later...
See ya

Since replying to this thread is still an available option how about we post some commentaries or criticsm?

TEXT 1
It exhibits the usual banter a diplomat of an alliance receives when one of their members did something that doesn't please another player.
"We have tried in our end to avail with him for almost 4 months
but to no avail."
This part is confusing. The content was short but fun. Over all, it's still fun to read.

TEXT 2
Who is Maxual Gutenberg? (is that the Author? oooh, grounds for disqualification

It's like I'm reading news from my daily bulletin or listening to news. It describes the "assumed daily activities" of the citizens within your local town.
The text takes your imagination to a spin but the weight of its content is not really that substantial.
Although the the content is limited, the effort sown in making it neat and presentable is very astounding.

TEXT 3
A story about a bunny named Benny. Well I can understand that he's scared of the "Demon Digger." A very nice story. It used elements of danger and suspense which was nice. But what I don't like is that WHY IS IT A DREAM


You should remember using the correct articles (a, an, the) and punctuation marks as well.
Sorry but I don't like "Dream Stories" (oh yes, just like Alice in Wonderland)

TEXT 4
Funny

Bunnies eat flowers. This sentence took all my attention

"He bought the chocolate for 10 euros." This sentence broke the 3rd world barrier

Short and nice brother, loved it. Overall

TEXT 5
This story has piqued my interest quite a bit as it is the only DRAMA I have read so far from all the entries. It's a narration about a child and his misfortunes.
Even though I don't know how sick the author's mind was pitting a poor helpless child to such misery, the overall plot of the story is really a big mystery which really makes you want to read it more.
Sad, but yet enticing.

I'll read the others and tell you what I think of them later...





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